Wikipedia contributions by Hbdragon88

create redirect

intro claims that Hayes was ID'd incorrectly - AFAIK this is not true

/* History */ remove mention of LX being Henschel's last SB, as the article doesn't say that.

remove malformed citation, already covered by first citation

should use the full name (Los Angeles Metro is informal) and when the Expo Line opened

should start by describing who he was before going into Monopoly

I don't think "reinstatement" is accurate as it implies that he is inducted, when he's just been removed from the banlist.

fix malformed sentence.

close parentheses

article description should have year of birth/death, also spell out 9/11

Updated short description

fix article description error (died 1943 not 1942)

/* Discovery of Mallory */ copyedit paragraph for tone (misuse of the word "you")

edit lead about the 1976 earthquake to flow more naturally (less abrupt)

use standard (dob - dod) format for leads

switch "Willis Tower" to "Sears Tower" since it's talking about 1973 and it was Sears Tower then.

/* Prostitution */ remove unsourced info. Questions should be commented out or {{cn}} but anyway it's unsourced

/* Death */ move "London flat" to the start of sentence

/* Death */ re-add some detail about how Wevill's suicide was seen as mimicking Plath's.

Reddit it definitely not a source for critical reception

fixed vandalism (someone keeps putting in Jess Mariano)

/* Main objectives */ European Space Agency on first mention, ESA afterwards

replace {{hanote}} with {{about}}

more changes from "Assia" to last name. use "Gutmann" through early life to make it less confusing.

/* The Secret World of Lewis Carroll (2015) BBC documentary */ fix italics

/* Controversies and mysteries */ the sub-header is too long, simplified it to just "The Secret World of Lewis Carroll (2015) BBC documentary"

/* Filmography */ fix Muscles & Mayhem wikilink

complete overhaul, removed/rewrote a lot of fluff passages, tone and style not encyclopedic

/* Career */ replace "talented" (again, superlative) with "professional"

/* Personal life */ add hidden comment that the phrasing is fine since it has gone back-and-forth

/* Career */ "talented" is puffery, replaced with more quantifiable "competitive"

Undid revision 1159497487 by [[Special:Contributions/Korathriller|Korathriller]] ([[User talk:Korathriller|talk]]) 'died by suicide' is acceptable phrasing, per [[MOS:SUICIDE]]

/* History */ revise - the stunt happened between 1Q and 2Q, not at halftime.

remove mention of Charlotte/NO change in intro, as it's more appropriate for history section; general copyedit

replace most instances of "Assia" with "Wevill" for formality/tone

some more rewrite

rewrite, less fluff, more to the point

Reverted edits by [[Special:Contribs/Mrjamesalex|Mrjamesalex]] ([[User talk:Mrjamesalex|talk]]) to last version by Johnj1995

minor grammar fix - we only use "nor" with "neither," but since we're not using that, changed to "or"

/* Early life */ massive rewrite - change most "Amanda" to "Nunes" (tone), rewrite extremely fluffy sections, remove extraneous details, get to the point quicker

/* Second flag-raiser corrections */ some more changes

/* Second flag-raiser corrections */ some rewrite, more to the point, less wordy

/* Second flag raising */ fix typo (Rosenthals's -> Rosenthal's)

/* Personal life */ revert to my version as the fluffy/poor tone of the original was restored without explanation

/* Personal Life */ junked most of the fluffy writing, stick to facts, formal tone

rewrite lead sentence to state what it is first instead of rushing right into "widely considered the first global conflict"

/* Personal life */ remove/rewrite super promotional-sounding wording

/* Product endorsements */ complete rewrite of the (extremely) awkward sentence about David Thorpe being there

/* Early life */ use of air quotes around "South Vietnam" is unnecessarily POV

"amazing" is peacock term, replace with quantifiable terms

restore {{short description}} and misplaced {{cite web}} (causing display issues)

fixed my own red link

wikilink to [[Istanbul Cevahir]]

/* Design and construction */ the WTC came after this project, but in this case I don't think it's really relevant to mention it.

the Oliver Stone film isn't a documentary - change to "2006 film"

Reverted edits by [[Special:Contribs/24.236.160.65|24.236.160.65]] ([[User talk:24.236.160.65|talk]]) to last version by 8.9.82.43

Reverted edits by [[Special:Contribs/2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47|2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47]] ([[User talk:2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47|talk]]) to last version by Hbdragon88

Reverted edits by [[Special:Contribs/2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47|2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47]] ([[User talk:2600:387:0:80D:0:0:0:47|talk]]) to last version by TheImaCow

add conviction oveturned bit

revert descriptions of it being fictitious or alleged; see talk

some copyedit, and again, Gagnon isn't known for incorrectly being identified. It was a recent change, and it doesn't take away from his being part of the flag raising or being on the 7th War Bond drive

delink murder wikilink - it's generic and not useful

rv vandalism

some rewrite, Gilmore Girls debuted as a WB show, put the "Year in the Life" info in the same paragraph, make reference to Amy Sherman-Palladino having created Gilmore Girls and Bunheads

/* Personal life */ "the late" is peacock language (unsuitable tone), add fact about when he died

/* Renovations */ change "SoFi" to "Hollywood Park" - that was the site they wanted to build on, SoFi came much later/anachronistic to mention

rewrite some passages for tone (too casual/chatty), add descriptor for Pizza Hut, remove the Internet mockery of Bush choosing it as his favorite book, it's irrelevant (the important bit that he chose it)

some rewrites to the intro - some of the Titanic info was a bit too detailed for lead, specify when Imperator went into service

some more rewrite, copyedit, tone; de-link second mentions; replace "refuted" with "denied" as incorrect use of the word

/* Life and career */ some more revisions, fix grammar issue I created

/* Life and career */ Fix Boxhall link (didn't realize the article did not exist), revise "Davy" to "David" for encyclopedic tone.

/* Life and career */ try to rewrite, be more concise, less flowery

/* Legacy */ that last part of added sentence is a straight copy-paste from the Williammurdoch.net website, without attribution, not a quote; it should be paraphrased, if used, but the level of detail is a bit too excessive.

/* Death */ some rewrites

/* Legacy */ some rewrite to be more concise, less wordy, following the cited links a bit better

some rewrite of prose, add context for some locations.

add "the" to a sentence that I rewrote, as it's otherwise grammatically wrong

rewrite lead - that section about 1.7% is pure original research, citing the report as a primary source; the final bit about "is just starting" is time-dated; also remove excessive detail not befitting an intro

remove sister's weight - less important than height

the intro was a bit wordy and redundant and repeated itself a couple of times. Hopefully rewritten to flow better

/* External links */ rm permanent dead link

Switch one date written as DD-MM - all other dates are written MM-DD.

/* Metro Rail */ the LACMTA didn't exist when Blue Line opened in 1990, it' was opened/operated by RTD

/* Service description */ some rewrite, also remove use of "Metro" before the line name/color, per MTA guidelines

typo (servie -> service)

/* Identification */ some more fixes I missed

/* Identification */ remove redlink to Diane Gilchrist - no article exists yet

/* Media appearances and further investigation */ fix ref - also, removed amwfans link as a unofficial fan page source, need better source

/* Media appearances and further investigation */ rewrite, make some things flow more logically, use "Orange Socks" before she was identified to avoid confusion

/* Early life */ rewrite line about sister, add a missing "and" for a sentence I rewrote

/* Cultural references */ rewrite for tone, copyedit

rewrite intro a bit

some more attempts at rewriting to create a sense of flow.

/* Examples */ rework Edward Smith line

/* ACT UP */ remove "in the NYT" - it's misplaced. The important part is the accusation, not where it was published; if restored, please add it to the end, as in "Kramer accused ... for HIV-infected Americans in the NYT"

/* Relationship with his brother */ some more revisions and rewriting

some rewriting, add "LLP" to Kramer Levin to avoid confusion with a person's name